HBO Fan Fiction

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Panic to Guide You
Posted by dom1 (moberly6@pacbell.net)
16 May 2005, 3:06 AM

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=dom1.0516050306231.html

LordsFire · Member Joined: 28 Dec 2004 Posts: 45 Location: Da U.P.

I like it. No high falutin' words, simple, intense, and very real seeming.

A picture of emotional reality. I like it.

Michael Archer · Posted: Mon May 16, 2005 9:04 pm Post subject: story

Ok, I hope it means something that I can't figure out.

Great poem, I like your use of words.

Commander Demitri Wolf · Posted: Tue May 17, 2005 12:48 am Post subject:

Great, much better than other stuff of yours I've read. Keep it up.

thedarkfire · Posted: Tue May 17, 2005 1:11 am Post subject:

Your flow and word choicage were pretty damn good.

You worked the italics to good extent. Good job.

Landlord · Member Joined: 14 May 2005 Posts: 7

i liked ur choice of words and how you used them in your piece. very good. keep it up

Zen-Army · Posted: Wed May 18, 2005 8:07 pm Post subject:

That poem pulls down my pants and mocks me.

Recent Flood Victim · Posted: Thu May 19, 2005 12:53 am Post subject:

Great poem.

And to Zen-Army...please dont say stuff like that. Its REALLY imature.

Zen-Army · Posted: Thu May 19, 2005 2:34 pm Post subject:

sorry if it sounded immature. Its an old saturday night live line that i've been wanting to use. I meant no offense. I though it was good, even though i'm not a fan of poetry.

Recent Flood Victim · Posted: Fri May 20, 2005 1:43 am Post subject:

No prob Zen, it was just a forward note for future use. I see your new and people around here FLAME n00bs. So just some advice. And if you need help with anything else give me a buzz.

Your neighborhood friend,
RFV

MC's Cousin · Mr. 1337 Joined: 30 Jul 2004 Posts: 2142 Location: Here.

Remember RFV, not all new people here are n00bs. They are, as a default, newbs, but no one has to be an "N-double-zero-B." You have to work towards that status.

The poem was alright. Seemed really jerky, and it didn't have all that much material in there to focus on. Three seconds after starting it was over. So the pace seemed way too fast. Still, it was alright.
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CoLd BlooDed · Posted: Sun May 22, 2005 2:55 am Post subject:

Recent Flood Victim · Posted: Sun May 22, 2005 2:59 am Post subject:

Oh come on....I was just picking with the guy. Don't bring my Light Hearted signature into this. lol. But any way sorry for calling you a Newb, or rather a n00b. It was not in my place and I did not know you. So once again I am sorry.

Your neighborhood friend,
RFV

dom1 · Posted: Sun May 22, 2005 9:21 pm Post subject:

This poem was meant to be short. Well, not short, but concise.
I'm very glad you liked it Very Happy

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