HBO Fan Fiction

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Massacre Game: Final Round : Ascension
Posted by CrazyGrunt (pkackerman@comcast.com)
9 May 2005, 7:40 AM

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=crazygrunt.0509050740484.html

MC's Cousin · Mr. 1337 Joined: 30 Jul 2004 Posts: 2142 Location: Here.

There is only so much I can say to try to help you. However, all of that depends on you actually taking up the advice, or even reading the comments at all. I have seen no evidence of this. I do hope you find these comments, even if it is by accident. They are important.

I will no go to repeat myself--re-type what has been left on past chapters. You have to go back and look at what you missed.
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Mainevent · Posted: Sat May 14, 2005 6:43 pm Post subject:

The Massacre Game was a nice title.

Shocked

pieman · Posted: Sat May 14, 2005 9:01 pm Post subject:

Honestly, this is your 4th fic and you still can't find the damn comment page.

Like the other 3, this one is almost impossible to read, has many grammatical and punctuation mistakes, makes very little sense... I'm not even going to bother with the rest.

Sorry man, but when once you read these comments and actually improve your writing, please feel free to submit again, but untill then, please spare us from the headaches your text walls of doom cause us...

Rolling Eyes

Wiley K. · Posted: Sun May 15, 2005 2:11 pm Post subject:

Well, at least it's over...

0/10

Mr. GotBeans · Posted: Thu May 19, 2005 11:20 pm Post subject:

I liked it. (Hey you guys know me, now cover your ears) And by liked it, I obviously me IT SUCKS BIG FLONKIN' DONKEY D!CK!!!!!! WHAT THE F*CK IS WRONG WITH YOU? ARE YOU MENTALLY CHANLENGED, OR JUST THE MOST IGNORANT PERSON IN THE UNIVERSE? I agree with Mainevent's last comment on this dude/ 8-year old/woman "story"

"Lets send 'people' to his house to 'break' his keyboard"

How 'bout his legs? Come on. As shitty as my first story, I tried.

MC's Cousin · Mr. 1337 Joined: 30 Jul 2004 Posts: 2142 Location: Here.

Hey now. Let's not get too degrading there. It's okay to tell people your opinion, but do try to put it in the most polite terms you can. All that there is akin to a flame, and flaming a person is just not right. Even in this case. Sure, I would like it if this person listened to the comments, but I'm still not gonna go on like that.

Constructive criticism.
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Mainevent · Posted: Fri May 20, 2005 10:37 pm Post subject:

What does it matter if he goes crazy and flames this guy? He apparently never listens to what we say anyway. It's not like he'll see it.