HBO Fan Fiction

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SPARTAN the meaning
Posted by ZACH-0013 (z_c_anderson@yahoo.com)
8 May 2005, 3:10 PM

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=zach-0013.0508051510361.html

Chuckles · Posted: Sat May 21, 2005 5:20 am Post subject:

P is for Proofreading. Check your work for spelling and grammar before you post it. In something this small there is no excuse for the number of mistakes you had.

Well, Zach, about your writing. Aside from the grammar and spelling, this was okay. But next time try something longer and more inventive--this was simple and extremely short. I bet you can do a lot better than this. I hope to see something more challenging from you some day. Give it a shot.

C.T. Clown

(Na)Marl · Posted: Sun May 22, 2005 5:17 am Post subject:

--Meh. Seemed a little kiddish. Needed to be deeper than ASOME. You used the same line twice, which is L, for laziness.