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PostPosted: Tue May 03, 2005 11:43 am    Post subject: Father's Eyes Reply with quote

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Father's Eyes
Posted by Chuckles
2 May 2005, 10:51 PM

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=chuckles.0502052251181.html
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PostPosted: Tue May 03, 2005 12:38 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Brilliant. Filled with darkness, loss, tragedy, and even the ending offers both a glimmer of hope and the option of complete and total loss. This is probably your best work yet.

Dark imagery fills this to the brim. We question what's real and what isn't, we're as confused and lost as your father is. This one holds you and refuses to let go. Well done. The dark side of the Spartan program at its best.
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PostPosted: Tue May 03, 2005 12:55 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

friggan awasoem... you are a inspration.... Very Happy
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PostPosted: Tue May 03, 2005 1:45 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Read this on fanfiction.net, but the second time's just as brillant as the first.
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PostPosted: Tue May 03, 2005 3:12 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Yeah, I already caught this as well, but it merits a second hand of applause.

Excellent, Chuckles. I love the feeling you creat amongst the confusion and reality, and how what seems to be an irrelevent dream is really a prelude to their real future. Also, brought in the dark side of the Spartan program, somewhat of a first, actually.

-Russ
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PostPosted: Tue May 03, 2005 10:20 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Everything's really symbolic throughout the story; I love it; the planets, the scar, childhood, dreams, and the title is great.

Almost everything has a double meaning, and it looks like the story runs a lot deeper.

I like a lotta Chuckles' works; because often a lotta the stuff deserves a lot more than a cursory glance; it's often a symbol, a relation, an allusion, or even a foreshadowing.

Everything's top-notch; the symbolism nets ya' a big bonus, friend!

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PostPosted: Tue May 03, 2005 10:39 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

One great way of displaying what thet Spartan program could have done to one father going through hard times. Kind of focused and not meaty, but that was not the story's intent.

The emotion wasn't enough to cause a real reaction from me, but plenty enough to evoke a good slew of thoughts. Nice short story to add to all your other work.
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PostPosted: Tue May 03, 2005 11:58 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Whoah. That was an intensely good story, once understood what had happened I felt a pang of heartache for the dad, usually even your stories don't get emotion like that out of me, this is you at your best. Original material, great conception of the dark side of the Spartan program. A side which is ignored in almost all fiction, and even when authors try to show the inhumanity, they fail by making it too impersonal and not giving it enough power for it to really matter to the reader, very well done.
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PostPosted: Wed May 04, 2005 12:19 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Great job, I've never seen anything like this done before...

Poor Michael.
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PostPosted: Wed May 04, 2005 2:14 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Awsome. Enough said.
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PostPosted: Wed May 04, 2005 6:07 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Crying or Very sad That was really sad. I could really tell that it was laced with some things other than just darkness though. Heck at first I thought that Michael was going crazy until I realized that the boy without the bruise was just a clone.

Well that was one of your finest Chuck. I love it.

Caleb
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PostPosted: Wed May 04, 2005 6:39 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Great job C.T. This was a great story.

I'm trying to make such connection between father-son or mother-son through my fiction. I think, I'll be PM'ing you soon about it. Hope you could help. C.T.

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PostPosted: Wed May 04, 2005 11:28 pm    Post subject: story Reply with quote

I loved it. Too bad it's not a series. I'd like to see David meet his dad again and then watch the planets.
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PostPosted: Wed May 04, 2005 11:29 pm    Post subject: story Reply with quote

Sorry for the double post, but I just noticed that even though you used the code, you didn't use the indent tags. Hmm......
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PostPosted: Thu May 05, 2005 1:12 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

That's his style Michael. We don't argue it anymore.
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