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Guerilla: Like Riding A 100,000 Year Old Bike
Posted by Mainevent
28 April 2005, 3:09 AM

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=mainevent.0428050309268.html

thedarkfire · Posted: Fri Apr 29, 2005 8:26 pm Post subject:

Aside from lenth, I loved it. I honestly have nothing to say in critisism.

Mainevent · Posted: Fri Apr 29, 2005 8:32 pm Post subject:

Well guys, I decided to do the easy thing and put the concepts on my site.

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Mainevent · Posted: Fri Apr 29, 2005 8:33 pm Post subject:

That didn't work in the least....

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thedarkfire · Posted: Fri Apr 29, 2005 8:43 pm Post subject:

Well, the interceptor is a lot bigger than I thought.

Mainevent · Posted: Fri Apr 29, 2005 9:00 pm Post subject:

That interceptor is NOT to scale.

The green "dots" in the ship battle picture represent the interceptors. The gray dots represent longswords, and the purple dots represent Seraphs.

russ687 · Posted: Fri Apr 29, 2005 9:07 pm Post subject:

Wow, that was really good.

I can't recall if I've read this series before, but I will start from here and check up some of the past.

Excellent job, Mainevent. Nothing major point out.

-Russ

Mark Lieberg · Posted: Fri Apr 29, 2005 11:40 pm Post subject:

That was AWSOME, EXCELLENT...lol I loved it.

Loved the battle scence and the ending. The Ending was a little funny....so haha. lol. That son of a bitch! lol

Yeah aite then. Great Job Main.
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thedarkfire · Posted: Fri Apr 29, 2005 11:59 pm Post subject:

Excuse me. Not the interceptor, the Archangel.

Mainevent · Posted: Sat Apr 30, 2005 3:59 am Post subject:

The Arkangel is essentially the ship from Halo 2, except slightly larger and with more firepower.

Bronzemage · Member Joined: 30 Dec 2004 Posts: 100

I love it!

I started reading this sreies a while ago, then didn't see the new updates. I think you've done an awesome job with describing the battle scenes, well done.

Chuckles · Posted: Sat Apr 30, 2005 6:42 am Post subject:

Nice job. Your details were vivid, making it easy to imagine what was happening. Given the subject matter, that is impressive. Your knowledge of the science and lingo involved in the Halo universe is thorough, giving your story a realistic feel. You effectively bring your reader into the world you are creating, and I think that says it all. Oh yes, I forgot about the action. Everybody tries to write action, but it is not easy to do and few do it well. Your sequences were excellent. I noticed the flow was a bit choppy in the first half of the story, but it smoothed out nicely once things got rolling.

Another good one. I'll be looking for the next.

C.T. Clown

SYSTEM · Posted: Sat Apr 30, 2005 2:14 pm Post subject:

Oy... that's creepy; losing control of you hands to a backseat driver. Oh, hold on, I know what you mean. Heh heh.

I like how you go for that long, easy, laid-back style; ...a flurry, a blur...

That's great there; describing your verbs through a noun. That's great there.

Keep up the good work, Main. A smile for you!

- Dave.
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Azrael · Member Joined: 10 Aug 2004 Posts: 504 Location: Boston

Flowed well, filled with action and hinting at deeper emotional levels, this was a feast of delicious literary dishes. Well done. I want seconds.
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Odin of SoS. · Member Joined: 27 Nov 2004 Posts: 85 Location: Iraq

i loved it main. and im glad to see ur still writing. been at this a long ass time havent ya? im actually working on a new story too. its gonna take a long time to get anything posted though. but its coming. keep it up bro.