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Halo 2 - The REAL Ending Part 2
Posted by Conrad Lauf (conniesworld_aka_hell@hotmail.com)
23 April 2005, 5:41 AM

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=conrad_lauf.0423050541392.html

SeverianofUrth · Posted: Mon Apr 25, 2005 3:31 pm Post subject:

Hilarious. This is what the world needed.

Darth Spartan · Posted: Mon Apr 25, 2005 3:41 pm Post subject: cool.

I think the last line was my favorite... are you sure chickens went extenct?

Chuckles · Posted: Mon Apr 25, 2005 4:39 pm Post subject:

Hilarious. My two favorite lines:

Azrael · Member Joined: 10 Aug 2004 Posts: 504 Location: Boston

Just tellin' it like it is: Johnson's invincible, infinite ammo...that hilarious. Though I think Stacker dies and comes back a few times as well. Personally, I think the things Stacker says in Halo 2 are funnier than Johnson (see signature).

I enjoyed the Covie perspective on this one. Nice to get a fresh look...especially the "easy settings" quip. Well done. Nothing to say about the flow here, since it's a comedy piece and I don't like having trivial things such as "flow" ruin my comedic experience *looks around warily for MCC*
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russ687 · Posted: Mon Apr 25, 2005 6:33 pm Post subject:

Pretty Good.

Not quite as funny as your last one, but I thought it was good. Still some GPS stuff you could pick up, but it was easy to brush off. Not much I can offer you besides the usual, so just keep working.

Looking forward to the next chapter.

-Russ

thedarkfire · Posted: Mon Apr 25, 2005 6:43 pm Post subject:

Jerry Springer...haha

Azrael · Member Joined: 10 Aug 2004 Posts: 504 Location: Boston

Question: are you going level to level on this? Cuz I think that what's you're doing, and it would be pretty funny to hear someone just start riping on the Scarab.

Not to mention the Arbiter flipping out about how his active camo "will not last."...
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The Arbiter stared at Half-Jaw in disbelief. "I'm the Covenant's greatest warrior! Even that f***ing Grunt's camo lasts longer than mine!"

The Grunt shrugged. "He's right...I always did wonder that..."
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Conrad Lauf · Member Joined: 30 Jul 2004 Posts: 139 Location: Australia

Yeah, I've been longing to rip on the Scarab for some time now. I always thought it belonged in another game, like Serious Sam- a legendary game worthy of the highest praise- seriously.
Oh, and I know the storyline is pretty much a rerun of the Campaign mode, but that's about to change very soon...
See you all later and thanks for your comments
Connie

MC's Cousin · Mr. 1337 Joined: 30 Jul 2004 Posts: 2142 Location: Here.

*MCC walks causally up behind Azrael, giving him a firm pat on the back* Did you notice how horrible the flow on this was? And the detail... Don't people take writing seriously any more?!

Ehem.

No, I was simply kidding. Though I do think that even comedies should be written well, and so the author should try to do so, I tried my best to look over the small stuff.

Now for quotes I liked:

HoZ · Posted: Tue Apr 26, 2005 1:14 pm Post subject:

that was great... i woke up my perents at six in the morning laffing.....hehehw... im grounded.... Very Happy

but i dont care...

Guardian · Posted: Tue Apr 26, 2005 8:30 pm Post subject:

Bronzemage · Member Joined: 30 Dec 2004 Posts: 100

Hilarious!

Nothing else to say.... I liked all of it, just keep how you're going.

SYSTEM · Posted: Wed Apr 27, 2005 4:57 pm Post subject:

Uhm... before I swing my judgement hammer down, was your work indended as a comedy?

- Dave.
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Conrad Lauf · Member Joined: 30 Jul 2004 Posts: 139 Location: Australia

Lol of course, it's basically just what I think of the strange flaws that Halo 2 has, but incorporated into a story.