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PostPosted: Fri Apr 22, 2005 4:20 pm    Post subject: when Reason knocks... Reply with quote

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when Reason knocks...
Posted by Cottrelli (nick_cottrelli@hotmail.com)
20 April 2005, 8:13 PM

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=cottrelli.0420052013441.html
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PostPosted: Fri Apr 22, 2005 6:21 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Interesting. I enjoyed it.
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PostPosted: Fri Apr 22, 2005 11:02 pm    Post subject: poem Reply with quote

Captial letters, "oncelistened", is NOT a compound word.

Besides that, it was pretty good.
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PostPosted: Fri Apr 22, 2005 11:09 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Only one punctuation and one capital letter...This could be a style thing like my poem but in this case, I think it detracts from the poem as a whole.

I did enjoy this too.
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PostPosted: Sat Apr 23, 2005 1:27 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

whoopsies on thecombined word, and yea, i think i may havgone a bit overboard w/ the whole not capitalizing thing
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PostPosted: Sat Apr 23, 2005 6:12 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Another good poem, Cotrelli. I liked it and have no complaints.

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PostPosted: Sat Apr 23, 2005 5:22 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I don't think it looked all that nice with no capitals. Looked kind of unprofessional. Didn't hurt how it was read, though.

Good theme in there. And pretty well written. Keep these up. Though, being a fan of stories, it would be good if you wrote one. And if you like poems, you could write some to match the story - chapters or just for whatever.

Overall, this was very nice. Keep up the work.
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PostPosted: Sun Apr 24, 2005 11:47 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I liked it.
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