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Waking the Dead—Prologue
Posted by Chuckles
18 April 2005, 2:09 PM

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=chuckles.0418051409431.html

SeverianofUrth · Posted: Tue Apr 19, 2005 3:22 pm Post subject:

You know, this is turning out to be a really great update. Very Happy

As for the story- what can I say? What, indeed, can I say? The first chapter alone hooked me in. (After all, I want to know what the hell were ODST's doing in the Arctic, how they were slaughtered by the Clowns, and what the hell the Clowns were doing.) (These are just assumption, by the way. Very Happy

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Just a question, though: is this connected with the events in Mission from SATU or Ghosts of Erebus?

Mendez · Member Joined: 16 Mar 2005 Posts: 89 Location: Classified

Chuckles,

That was awesome. A little short but awsome.

Nothing that I saw wrong. Well cya later. Keep it up.

Mendez

Very Happy

Azrael · Member Joined: 10 Aug 2004 Posts: 504 Location: Boston

What an update, indeed. I did not see a new series from you coming so soon.

Shorter than your regulars, but this was a prolouge, and it did just what it came to do: took us in. Oh man, you may have spent maybe two sentences on it, but that second where Gus thought he saw Sim was incredibly vivid in my mind, and really spooky. In a movie, that's a classic double-take.

Good opening. Bring it on.
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SYSTEM · Posted: Tue Apr 19, 2005 8:21 pm Post subject:

The opening reminds me of what I had opening the third issue of TFMCBG, except for that part... Cah-reeeeeeepey!

The name Gina cracked me up. No, really it did. I mean, what's the term again? Gi-no? Something like that. I mean, there was this rock concert, where to get the crowd's attention, they asked everyone to clear a space down the center of the place, and then said, 'Now imagine it's full of Ginos!" and then, "Now, on three, attack! One, two... three!" And then, well, a small riot ensued.

Yep, that cracked me up so bad. I was laughing it up, man.

Though the rest just chilled me over, though. It's twenty-one degrees, (No, that's celcius, so that means its slightly warm up here), outside, and I felt like SHIVERING!

- Dave.
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Chuckles · Posted: Wed Apr 20, 2005 12:43 am Post subject:

Severian wrote:

thedarkfire · Posted: Wed Apr 20, 2005 1:27 am Post subject:

Awsome. Creepy. Did I mention awsome?

MC's Cousin · Mr. 1337 Joined: 30 Jul 2004 Posts: 2142 Location: Here.

This update was marvelous. Lots of good stuff to look at. Too bad I don't have time to hit it all right now. Gotta hit the bar...

Anyway. I was not expecting another series so soon, either. But, Chuck is full of surprises.

Really short, and it seemed slightly underdeveloped, but it was a prologue. Still thought the mood could have been set a tad stronger, and more descrption could have been used. Damn I'm picky.

Overall, seems like it will be a good start to a series. Doesn't cross me as something as complex as Ghosts, but still something that will turn out to be of good quality. Keep up the great work.
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CoLd BlooDed · Posted: Wed Apr 20, 2005 2:47 am Post subject:

Wow, I could imagine this part as if it was a movie, especially when Gus thought he saw something by the doorway (basically, I agree with Azrael).

Yeah, I know, I know--this was a prologue, but I think you could've stretched out the section where the lights go out and Simjanes comes in. That was a little sparse, but otherwise it was good.

I smiled at the last line. Cruel, cruel irony. Then I imagined the opening credits starting (hehe, my movie reference)...

*prays he's in this series*

Wink

Chuckles · Posted: Wed Apr 20, 2005 4:16 am Post subject:

CoLd wrote:

Caleb the Jackal · Posted: Wed Apr 20, 2005 12:43 pm Post subject:

I read it yesterday and then class ended so I didn't get a chance to post. Well It was awsome. I actually shivered when Gus saw Simjanes. Freaked me out. But ya keep it up.

The was cool.

Caleb

Wiley K. · Posted: Wed Apr 20, 2005 11:55 pm Post subject:

w00t..more creepy Multiplayer-based goodness.

9/10

Will you be using any characters from Erebus or SATU in this one?

Chuckles · Posted: Thu Apr 21, 2005 12:04 am Post subject:

Wiley wrote:

Wiley K. · Posted: Thu Apr 21, 2005 12:24 am Post subject:

Just so you know, Chuck:

If you want to say "BLAHBLAHBLAH wrote":

{quote="BLAHBALHBLAH"}

Hehe..took me forever to figure that out.

russ687 · Posted: Thu Apr 21, 2005 12:54 am Post subject:

Never really read anything by you, Chuckles. But I must say, well done. My only hipe was the "Hmmmm." part; describe it rather than spell it. This was very mysterious and left the reader wanting more, excellent job there.

The ending seemed a little weaker than what you were alluding to, but it was good. I look forward to your next posting.

-Russ