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hboff
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snowy_duck
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Off - the opposite of on "He turned OFF the light"
Of - a totaly different word from off and should be known
you should know the difference between off and of and use each accordingly. basic grammar man. there were many many errors in your typing, please just reread your story before you submit it. |
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Conrad Lauf
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Oook. There were a couple of errors with that story. I don't want to sound fussy or anything, but I thought i'd point out a few things.
1. Elites probably wouldn't say:
"Easy target you sitting duck." Think about it. They're from another planet, and have most likely never even heard of ducks, let alone heard the phrase 'sitting duck'.
2. A sniper never, and I say NEVER screams out. There a number of risks associated with doing that, including giving away your position, and letting the enemyknow why their dying so fast.
3. Grammar and spelling. Always re-read over your story and get someone else with good english to read over your fiction. I think most of your errors were typos.
Work on those things, and your next chapter should get a good one.
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