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Halo: Stealth Combat Evolved: Part 1-Chapter 4

 
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PostPosted: Mon Aug 16, 2004 3:31 pm    Post subject: Halo: Stealth Combat Evolved: Part 1-Chapter 4 Reply with quote

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Halo: Stealth Combat Evolved: Part 1-Chapter 4
Posted by Mind_Affecting_Parasite (pbplayer_24@yahoo.com)
15 August 2004, 8:43 PM

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=mind_affecti.0815042043135.html
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PostPosted: Tue Aug 17, 2004 3:50 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Nice, but if you even think about stopping your other series I'll hunt you down and super glue a pencil to your hand and force you to write. Do I make myself clear?
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PostPosted: Wed Aug 18, 2004 11:29 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Pretty good perspective of Spartan(s), they sounded pretty good. Maybe not exact, but these are Spartans that we don't really know yet.
I would have liked a little more detail with the whole suit thing, like what kind of material the helmets were made out of, the way you put it sounded like you had an idea for what you wanted the things to do, but not how to make them do it. Just do some research or something about that kind of thing.
You made "John" sound kinda immature in a relationship kinda sense, but then again, I know a couple guys like that myself.
The whole fight between the Marine and his wife was interesting, I thought she majorly over reacted, but, maybe that's just me.

Overall, this was another great addition to this series. A few mistakes here and there, but nothing serious.

And yes, I will join Mastergrunt in his hunt for you if you don't finish it up. You had a good thing going with your other series, I personally I think that starting a series and not finishing it is just plain stupid; not to mention annoying and frustrating if the series happened to be good.
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