HBO Fan Fiction

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A Lost Doctor
Posted by Random 14-Year-Old (i-rule-2008@sbcglobal.net)
28 February 2005, 2:03 AM

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=random_14-ye.0228050203221.html

Chuckles · Posted: Sat Mar 05, 2005 1:45 pm Post subject:

Short, but well done. Too short.

But well done.

C.T. Clown

Random 14-Year-Old · Member Joined: 20 Jan 2005 Posts: 81 Location: California

Thanks. Eh, I was bored so I figured, why not throw together a Halo poem? Rolling Eyes

MC's Cousin · Mr. 1337 Joined: 30 Jul 2004 Posts: 2142 Location: Here.

Interesting. I agree that it was far too short. It could have been a lot bigger and longer. Expanded and filled with symbolism. A good idea for a poem, but next time try to develop it a bit more.

Overall, it was a poem. A fairly decent one. But keep working to improve. Good luck.
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