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The Devil's Maw: Part 2
Posted by Conrad Lauf (conniesworld_aka_hell@hotmail.com)
10 August 2004, 10:19 AM

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=conrad_lauf.0810041019022.html

Brigade_of_marines · Posted: Wed Aug 11, 2004 7:47 pm Post subject:

Tihs isn't my area of expertise, but please, could you indent. You may not have to, but to some it may make it easier to read. Otherwise good story. Shouldn't charged plasma be slightly locking on to it's target? Is this guy a spartan or a Marine? Otherwise good story.

Conrad Lauf · Member Joined: 30 Jul 2004 Posts: 139 Location: Australia

Please forgive me Brigade, but I don't really know what indenting is. I looked for its explanation on the Directions For Submitting pages, but couldn't find out. Could you help at all? Oh, and Argave is a SPARTAN

Cheers Very Happy

Conrad Lauf · Member Joined: 30 Jul 2004 Posts: 139 Location: Australia

Oh yeah, and although I know plasma is slightly lock-onable, I don't think it really matters that much in a story.
Cheers

Wado · The Hammer Joined: 26 Jul 2004 Posts: 320

Brigade_of_marines · Posted: Thu Aug 12, 2004 7:44 pm Post subject:

THIS SUCKS!!!!! A dumb hurricane is coming to hit florida. I really hate hurricanes. The only thing goood is that if we're lucky we get a day off of school. Oh, and thanks Wado. I didn't know about the double spacing. it's nice to learn something everyday. And if you write a story how Haloy should it be... I have a story thats good but it may not be Haloy enough and I don't know if it could work. So is there any form of help i can get to answering these questions?

Brigade_of_marines · Posted: Thu Aug 12, 2004 7:45 pm Post subject:

THIS SUCKS!!!!! A dumb hurricane is coming to hit florida. I really hate hurricanes. The only thing goood is that if we're lucky we get a day off of school. Oh, and thanks Wado. I didn't know about the double spacing. it's nice to learn something everyday. And if you write a story how Haloy should it be... I have a story thats good but it may not be Haloy enough and I don't know if it could work. So is there any form of help i can get to answering these questions?

Wado · The Hammer Joined: 26 Jul 2004 Posts: 320

Chuckles · Posted: Fri Aug 13, 2004 6:28 am Post subject:

You do a good job with your action. Getting your character in and out of several life threatening situations can be hard, especially when he is acting alone. It isn't often you see a story that is action all the way through.

I don't indent, I use block paragraphing. After each paragraph I double space, like what Wado told you. Some people don't like it, but it makes it easier on my eyes than just indenting. In the end, choose any paragraphing style that you are comfortable with, just as long as you paragraph.

Good job.

C.T. Clown